Novel Gems ~ 09-04-12 ~ Killing Secrets by Karen Docter

 

 

Welcome to Novel Gems ~ Killing Secrets 09-04-12!

I love to sneak a peek into a writer friend’s developing novel. It’s just so much fun watching their story grow and getting the inside scoop.  So every Tuesday until I finish my romantic suspense, Killing Secrets, I’ll share a gem with you ~ a couple of sentences, several paragraphs of a pivotal scene, or a phrase that just made me sigh or laugh out loud or scares me or…well, you get the picture.

A bit of set up for today’s gem….

Last Thursday, I finally wrote — and finished — a scene that’s been giving me grief for months. I’ve been skipping all around this transition scene, trying this, reworking that, and could never quite find my way through the maze. My recent camping trip epiphany (see Karen’s Drop-In Diary)  set me on the right path. I ripped a character out of the scene before the problematic scene –it was so painful, but Jack just has to wait for his own book — but it fixed my path. Once I started, the new scene cooked. Here are the first paragraphs.

Sounds so easy, huh? NOT! 🙂

Happy Reading!

Karen

KILLING SECRETS ~ Novel Gem By Karen Docter

Rachel stood frozen in the doorway trying to decide whether to go or stay before someone noticed her.  She wasn’t in the mood to talk to anyone, let alone the man standing in the middle of the kitchen talking to the woman who’d been taking care of her since picking her up from the hospital earlier.  Their problem was Rachel, of course. But she was done with people running her life so it was difficult to turn away and let them decide her fate.

She shouldn’t have taken the pain pills the doctor prescribed before releasing her from the hospital.  She’d awakened from her nap feeling nauseous and weak as a kitten.  It took her a full ten minutes to pull on panties, a peach-colored Tee and jeans.  When she reached down to pick up her bra from the floor where it had fallen, she’d almost passed out.  It was still lying on the floor upstairs.

She was not up to fighting strength and she needed to be, dammit!

“Come on in, Rachel.”  Patrick looked straight at her, his left eyebrow quirked like he’d known she was hovering there all along.  “You should be in on this conversation, too.”

….see you next Tuesday with another NOVEL GEM!

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2 Responses to Novel Gems ~ 09-04-12 ~ Killing Secrets by Karen Docter

  1. Mari Collier says:

    It’s hard to take out a character that wants to be heard. This is good.

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